Post by James "Mustang" Morrison on Jan 2, 2010 4:32:17 GMT -5
Taking another crack at it. This here is the first two pages of a twenty two page comic book, issue one of what is tentatively titled "The Hidden War." Story arc is called "Nobody's Hero." Feedback is greatly appreciated, including better titles for the book.
PAGE 1
1.1 HALF PAGE PANEL. A dark London street ((need reference)), the only light is from the street lamps, all the storefronts are dark. Snow is piled up on the side of the road, and there is a light snowfall beginning even now. A BUSINESSMAN in a suit with a briefcase has his hand out, hailing a cab, which is stopping just in front of him.
BOTTOM OF PAGE IS THREE REGULAR SQUARE PANELS
1.2 Door ajar, BUSINESSMAN getting into cab, outside shot
BUSINESSMAN: THANK YOU. HEATHROW PLEASE; TAKE THE M4.
1.3 FRONT WINDSHIELD VIEW INTO THE CAB. Cabby and Businessman are facing the “camera.” CABBY in the left foreground, BUSINESSMAN in the right background.
BUSINESSMAN: THERE’S A STOP ALONG THE WAY. NOT TOO FAR. I WILL TELL YOU WHEN WE’RE THERE.
CABBY: *HRN*
1.4 Same as last panel but BUSINESSMAN’s eyes have spied the license behind CABBY’S seat, mouth speaking. Put a PANEL BOX around CABBY’S head.
BUSINESSMAN: …MILOSH.
PAGE 2
2.1-2.6: Six square panels. 2.7-2.8 Divide the rest of the space into two panels
2.1 No PANEL BOX around his head.
BUSINESSMAN: MILOSH MIKHAIL ALEKSANDROV. YOU’RE A RUSSIAN LAD, THEN?
MILOSH: AMERICAN, ACTUALLY.
2.2 BUSINESSMAN: HA! AN AMERICAN!
MILOSH: WHAT’S SO FUNNY?
BUSINESSMAN: WELL IT’S IRONIC ISN’T IT?
2.3 BUSINESSMAN: YOU CHAPS, ALWAYS COMPLAINING ABOUT “THOSE DAMNED FOREIGNERS” COMING IN AND TAKING AMERICAN JOBS, AND HERE YOU ARE A FOREIGNER TAKING AN ENGLISHMAN’S JOB! HAHAHA!
MILOSH: YEAH I COULD SEE HOW THAT’D BE FUNNY.
2.4 BUSINESSMAN: HAHA YES. OH! HERE’S THE STOP, UP AHEAD THERE.
2.5 BUSINESSMAN looks down, opening his briefcase.
SFX: CLK!
BUSINESSMAN: WON’T TAKE A MOMENT.
2.6 BUSINESSMAN is now pointing a gun at the back of MILOSH’S head.
BUSINESSMAN: THE MASTER SAYS “YOU WERE A WORTHY FOE, MILES LANDON. GOODBYE.”
2.7 Exterior of Cab
SFX: KA-CLICK
2.8 Cab’s windows are lit up
SFX: BLAM!
DERP!
PAGE 1
1.1 HALF PAGE PANEL. A dark London street ((need reference)), the only light is from the street lamps, all the storefronts are dark. Snow is piled up on the side of the road, and there is a light snowfall beginning even now. A BUSINESSMAN in a suit with a briefcase has his hand out, hailing a cab, which is stopping just in front of him.
BOTTOM OF PAGE IS THREE REGULAR SQUARE PANELS
1.2 Door ajar, BUSINESSMAN getting into cab, outside shot
BUSINESSMAN: THANK YOU. HEATHROW PLEASE; TAKE THE M4.
1.3 FRONT WINDSHIELD VIEW INTO THE CAB. Cabby and Businessman are facing the “camera.” CABBY in the left foreground, BUSINESSMAN in the right background.
BUSINESSMAN: THERE’S A STOP ALONG THE WAY. NOT TOO FAR. I WILL TELL YOU WHEN WE’RE THERE.
CABBY: *HRN*
1.4 Same as last panel but BUSINESSMAN’s eyes have spied the license behind CABBY’S seat, mouth speaking. Put a PANEL BOX around CABBY’S head.
BUSINESSMAN: …MILOSH.
PAGE 2
2.1-2.6: Six square panels. 2.7-2.8 Divide the rest of the space into two panels
2.1 No PANEL BOX around his head.
BUSINESSMAN: MILOSH MIKHAIL ALEKSANDROV. YOU’RE A RUSSIAN LAD, THEN?
MILOSH: AMERICAN, ACTUALLY.
2.2 BUSINESSMAN: HA! AN AMERICAN!
MILOSH: WHAT’S SO FUNNY?
BUSINESSMAN: WELL IT’S IRONIC ISN’T IT?
2.3 BUSINESSMAN: YOU CHAPS, ALWAYS COMPLAINING ABOUT “THOSE DAMNED FOREIGNERS” COMING IN AND TAKING AMERICAN JOBS, AND HERE YOU ARE A FOREIGNER TAKING AN ENGLISHMAN’S JOB! HAHAHA!
MILOSH: YEAH I COULD SEE HOW THAT’D BE FUNNY.
2.4 BUSINESSMAN: HAHA YES. OH! HERE’S THE STOP, UP AHEAD THERE.
2.5 BUSINESSMAN looks down, opening his briefcase.
SFX: CLK!
BUSINESSMAN: WON’T TAKE A MOMENT.
2.6 BUSINESSMAN is now pointing a gun at the back of MILOSH’S head.
BUSINESSMAN: THE MASTER SAYS “YOU WERE A WORTHY FOE, MILES LANDON. GOODBYE.”
2.7 Exterior of Cab
SFX: KA-CLICK
2.8 Cab’s windows are lit up
SFX: BLAM!
DERP!